Bad Moon Rising

Vladimir I haven't spoken my last word yet...

At 12, no option to walk away from the iron grille and go either east or west? (Not that it appears necessary to win.)


12, 16, 17, 29, 33, 41, 78 - extra spaces before question marks.

1

"Out in the torch lit street, walking quickly, your cloak and Jakob's great-coat" (shouldn't hyphenation be reversed here, going from great-coat to torch lit?)

5

" it's ragged little feet"

7

"The right hand wheel"

12

"looks far too heavy for you to think of moving," (it?) + "right hand" (twice) and "left hand".

13

"begin to hit it open palmed." (hyphenation?)

17

"It's off white" (hyphenation?)

24

"to discard the shield ," (extra space.)

26

" with a tall vaulted ceiling." (Comma?) + space before the final comma and a question mark.

29

"The corridor is low ceilinged" (hyphenation?)

30

"you notice a couple of torches strapped to the walls, and, after a short struggle, manage to get it lit." (them?) + "is a another grid-style portcullis" + "by two stone lions heads" (?) + space before the final comma and a question mark.

32

"The wheel spins round bonlessly." (?)

35

"two open mouthed lions" + "wider set" + "Peering into their maws, but it's difficult to see much inside either of them." (Shouldn't it be "You peer" or something?) + space before the final comma and a question mark.

42

"- deduct one stamina point." (not capitalized?)

44

"isn't enough to let you see (how?) deep it is."

62

"Billy's other henchman's gaping open mouthed at his screaming boss" (hyphen, and the apostrophes are weird.)

72

"and his two thugees" (?)

77

"foot of the grave-marker - a stout stone podium, on top of which lies a carving of a tall, stern faced man made of some rough looking, dappled grey rock." - again not sure about where hyphenation is present and absent.

"It's started to rain" (?) + "overgrown south-east corner" + "reading the grave-stone" + "The whole front-plate" (is all this hyphenation necessary?)

+ ""Right," you say "tie the rope" (punctuation?)

27 + 46 - space before the final comma and a question mark.

3

" chops at it's legs'll send it"

4

"pus white" + "half formed" + "skutter" + "shmeq" (??? Intentional?)

8

"in which sword wielding zombies"

10 - extra spaces before question marks.

14

"at your self" + STAMINA not in caps?

20

"the portcullis"


27

"You wander down a half flooded corridor" + " it's stench"

28

"from it's moorings"

33

"at the cross roads."

36

"with that headaching purple light"

47

"and very very tired." (comma?) + "ice cold water"