Enjoyable! And still wondering what the backstory is...
Bob Fri Apr 21 01:57:52 2017
This was short, but it was very cool!
Migo Wed May 10 17:48:39 2017
Short, quite predictable. You'd need to flesh out the story quite a lot to avoid the twist being obvious from the start.
Well, it was fun all the same, and the storytelling was quite good in parts.
bluejuice915 Sun Jun 18 01:44:55 2017
Talk about a close shave. I forgot to eat provisions before the final battle and ended at 1 stamina. While the plot was good, and the choices abundant, battles are greatly preferable to tests. The insta-deaths were annoyingly good. A lot depends on getting good initial rolls to survive the wolf attack. Reasonable, and worthwhile if you like small, choice based adventure, but not my cup of tea. Grade: 90
RogueOne Wed Oct 25 19:31:35 2017
Done!
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What is the point of the red rose mark?
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Alex Fri Dec 8 04:51:23 2017
Not interesting, There is only one path through and if you die every single wrong option then its not fun, basically forced to choose.
Fra Fri Apr 6 23:00:05 2018
Dead
paul Tue Mar 12 11:58:13 2019
didn't last long, should have tried to outrun the avalanche!
Ta123 Sat May 11 16:29:34 2019
Nice Game
Ross H Sat Jun 15 13:38:41 2019
This seems very hard
Snori Thu Jun 27 21:10:26 2019
Hm. First attempt and sudden death... Lets give the story second chance...
Thalantyr Wed Aug 21 01:40:25 2019
A bit too short. I liked it, tho.
Heksefatter Fri May 28 22:06:18 2021
I loved this. But I wish the tragic evil ending was a bit more fleshed out.
Mage Mon Oct 18 09:56:08 2021
And a short one to round out Day 1 of my nostalgia run here...
Although I think this one is more difficult than the "easy" rating that was assigned to it.
b8 Thu Sep 8 17:38:22 2022
i got eaten so many times. how is this 'easy'?
YARD Mon Sep 4 12:21:01 2023
Well, well, well, this is a 54-ref work, and apparently it was intentionally written as a prologue rather than something truly standalone. I wish these limitations weren't there, but I would say it does about as well as it could even in their presence!
In particular, I really like the way this work makes skill checks feel as not just a formality, or perhaps a way to suddenly fail that you just have to hope to pass, but as genuinely gruelling struggle against numerous obstacles from your character. Out of what I have seen to date, only Nye's Song really captured this feeling this strongly. (Although my beloved A Princess of Zamarra, as well as The Word Fell Silent and Soul Tracker, also come to mind if effective use of skill checks is to be discussed.)
That, and ref 2 is one of the most impressively written bad endings I have ever seen. The others, such as 36, are really good as well. There is also a decent amount of variation for such length, including near the end.
However, it is funny that
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Background says Diuron is presumed dead after he was captured by mutant goblins, but that whole episode somehow doesn't warrant even a single mention during your reunion. I did like that if you have managed to break through to him, he'll not only be at his weakest (while you'll be weakened if you do not talk to him at all before the fight), but there's an extra ref with a prayer over his body.
I am also curious about how Chaos is treated here. Not only does this story insist on writing it in lowercase (as well as "warriors of chaos" in the bad ending), unlike Hellfire, but the portrayal is different as well. Warriors of Chaos in Hellfire seemed far more energetic and independent-minded in Hellfire: the second one didn't seem to manifest existential anguish and depression both Diuron and the evil player show, and the first didn't ever seem to have her will overridden in the manner seen here. I do not know enough about the canonical books to even know when Chaos was introduced into the setting (and if it was before or after it entered Warhammer, since the two franchises started around the same time), let alone how it was portrayed there, so I wonder which of these FFP stories is closer.
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Lastly, I should note that it's considerably better proof-read than some of the other similarly-old and similarly-sized works, which have somehow managed to be absolutely littered with various grammatical issues in spite of their short length. However, it is not completely free of such issues either. (To day, Bloodsworth Bayou might have been the only one that was free of them.)
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Background:
"Less than a year ago, Salamonis was threatened itself" (itself threatened?) + " find out first hand" (firsthand?) + "and (the) lack of aid by your people." + "you have only enough food" + "it could take you weeks yet to locate" (is "yet" in the right place?)
2 - "a well used" (hyphen.)
4 - "even you own clan!"
4, 5, 8, 9, 55 - spaces before question marks.
5 - " in mid scream"
7 - missing question mark at the end.
8 - "to almost half way up" + "to take in the implication this damage" + "less hide bound" (?) + the lack of a question mark in the penultimate sentence.
9 - "about half an hours walk" + "at right angles to the one you're in," (?)
11 - at least the last two sentences need to end with question marks instead of periods.
20
"as best you can." (as?) + the long sentence with three "enough"s is hardly ideal writing.
34, 42 - "dark edged axe"
36 - " so bone deep tired."
37
"How could I be such a fool." (question mark?) + "something unhuman" (inhuman? And would a dwarf even use either word in the first place?) + " dark tinged axe"
44 - "foot long claws"
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dlc Fri Jul 19 06:04:25 2024
my first time playing something like this and everything went right. thank you for making this!