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ffproject Sat Dec 17 14:02:19 2011
The Word Fell Silent
Kieran Coghlan's biblical gamebook is now ready.
Judea groans under the rule of the Roman Empire, its king, Herod Agrippa II, nothing more than a puppet for the Roman governor. Some demand action against the Romans, others believe it a mistake to antagonise their masters. And there is turmoil between the different Jewish sects and with the new religion that has grown recently, spreading throughout the Roman World and threatening the Jewish faith: Christianity.
Like the other three gamebooks added recently, it has multiple paths to success. In this case there are three different sects you can belong to, and three different companions you can encounter, so if you feel like a challenge, you could try to complete it for all nine possible combinations.
Haoie Tue Dec 20 10:43:00 2011
The Word Fell Silent is very interesting! Too bad I'm not so great with theology or history.
Elijah Thu Dec 12 14:26:31 2013
Hmmmm...cleverly constructed story, great vocabulary etc. However a great shame you chose to present esoteric Gnostic nonsense rather than the True Gospel (Good News) of Christianity. Christ Was and IS GOD - clearly the story would have played better had you acknowledged that or at least NOT tried to present the heretical ideas of 6th Century Gnostic believers and their corruption of Early Church Christianity. Pray YOU can find the truth before the End. Jesus DOES Love You. John 3:16.
Gaetano Thu Dec 12 19:23:37 2013
@ Elijah
While respectfully leaving aside the question of personal belief regarding the true nature of Christ, as this is not the place to proselytize, I do agree that it's rather curious that many otherwise intelligent people misinterpret the very staightforward evidence regarding what Christ claimed about himself.
Yaztromo Mon Dec 16 18:36:26 2013
I met Paul, but I don't know what I missed and I died poisoned...
Yaztromo Mon Dec 16 18:53:18 2013
I'm not sure about what I did right this time... I just found a different companion for my mission, but on my side I didn't do anything particularly different...
Yaztromo Mon Dec 16 18:55:16 2013
I can't find this gamebook in the downloads list, so I can't be sure about what is the trick...
I like the setting. I find the goal exiting! Great work!
Andrč Wed Dec 25 17:23:49 2013
Cut down by bandits in the night... road to Ptolemais. ;-) Atmospheric, yet weird to me personally.
gigs Sun Jan 5 08:13:43 2014
Great Fun!
gigs Sun Jan 5 14:35:47 2014
Cool game. Got to 47, bodyguard killed me. Can someone help me?
ben Sun Jan 5 17:09:50 2014
interesting
KingJezza Mon Jan 20 15:24:30 2014
Heavy on the written word and low on decision making.
Yaztromo Tue Jan 21 17:35:11 2014
@gigs this gamebook is quite open to different solutions and combinations: there is no one true path. Have a look at the text version of the adventure (the location of the text version is mentioned few messages ago) and you'll realize this.
Scott Wed Feb 5 03:15:55 2014
The historical context is very rich and well researched.
dark Mon Apr 6 17:01:42 2015
Well I died. love the setting and the detail, it reminds me of a comment one of the Doctor who writers made about the historical stories, that there are periods of history just as dangerous and alien as any other planets.
I do wonder though how useful some of the attributes are, sinse Though I believe I died through failing a test of lore and getting the poisoned cup routine, I didn't notice any other tests, ---- unless the website automatically passes tests when you have the right attribute, I'm not sure.
dark Tue Apr 7 21:11:29 2015
Well I did it, though the ending was a bit abrupt.
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I'd be interested to know how you make it through with Judus. I didn't find a way at all even when I succeeded with his law test, and while I did it with the woman Elenna from Greice it seemed a miner cheat considering I never really got to confront Paul, just stuck him as he ran away from Elenna which was a little cheap.
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Then again, I can sere there are two other sects to try so maybe one of those does a better job with Judus.
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Coetir Anian Mon May 11 17:40:59 2015
Excellent!
Though light on decision-making, there are many paths to explore in this book, and it's worth revisiting many times. Overall a very atmospheric and thought-provoking gamebook; sort of a more serious Life of Brian!
I have to say this author has some of the more unorthodox gamebooks on this site - the Arthurian adventure is also particularly good. Onto my last one now: Hunger of the Wolf!
Thanks a lot for these offerings (no pun intended).
Jack Sat Aug 20 11:07:53 2016
Not IMO a spoiler, but as u can guess, this adventure does not change history. So pointless quest, how ever interesting it is. Moral of the story being:
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do not make martyrs out of them. If they failed with Jesus, why would they succeed with his followers?
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Also:
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cool twist with Judas
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oy veyowitz Wed Oct 19 00:43:07 2016
the samaritans shoa'd me
Gavin Fri Dec 23 11:42:11 2016
Hey this was really good. Gonna go back and try the higher SKILL option and see if I can rescue the priestess of Aphrodite...
bluejuice915 Tue Mar 28 01:40:57 2017
Extreme kudos on making a gamebook with such a controversial plot. It was quite entertaining, and the break from semi-cliched sci-fi plot was good. I typically like more battles, but the choices made up for that. I'm not sure if there are multiple endings, but I may well come back to look for them. The character option was nice too. Grade: 99
Alice Mon Nov 6 12:05:28 2017
Good storyline with multiple options and attributes which you can use.
RogueOne Tue Nov 28 22:41:37 2017
Done!
jp Mon Jan 28 05:39:37 2019
took a few attempts
paul Mon Mar 18 14:06:08 2019
killed in combat. this is an intriguing gamebook and i am looing forward to having another go.
Quick Games Sat Apr 4 02:34:55 2020
Had confusion how the stamina was being added as it seems ransom
Cyber Baby Fri Oct 22 05:13:46 2021
WTF, CyberJudas. Frik you, man!
Thnes Maeswara Tue Mar 8 15:16:28 2022
lol
YARD Thu Aug 24 12:38:51 2023
So far, Kieran is definitely my favourite author on here! Other than those 50-ref experiments, his works succeed at truly placing you into the mindset of unconventional characters with unconventional, yet firmly held goals, surrounded by a memorable and well-defined cast. Further, they provide a great range of choices and branching outcomes, all while remaining completely logical. This story is no exception!
I reached the successful ending (ref 100) via two different paths when I started writing this. I at first assumed that since it is only 100 refs altogether, and there are some unpredictable refs like the random misfortunes which may befall the ships you travel on, that this would be it, and began writing this. Then, I remembered briefly spotting one more character, and found not just his ending, but a whole lot of refs in the city of Rhodes that are a welcome surprise.
I can only think of one notable flaw, and it's the one this story would share with Outsider!, the most prominent tale about assassination here.
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That being the lack of imagination about the whole assassination business. If Lot has no companions, he cannot think of anything more refined than simply charging through the front door in broad daylight to meet a predictable end, and even the companions' approaches aren't exactly all that well-planned, succeeding more on chance. (For Elena, the lack of a follow-up on her fate suggests that for her, it ended up a suicide mission either way?) Was there really no way to wait for night-time, to set the place on fire to get him out, etc.? If anything, you are told at the very start he intends to travel away from Rome once his house arrest is lifted: why not try to ambush him on the road?
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Some have made a complaint that the ending is less significant than it could have been, but it's just as easy to argue that this is the very point, so I'm not holding it against the story.
With my recommendation of the story itself complete, it's time for the now-usual business of typo-hunting!
7 "before his thrown is transfixed by a hurled javelin."
11 " the awareness that you are the only member of the crew still alive slowly dawning you"
51
"you have no choice (but?) to agree."
61
"your heart goes out to this beautiful brave girl.Will you:"
64
"after witnessing your magnificent shot.."
66
"you have travelled hundreds of league to"
74
"' you begin, 'that"
79 'Doesn't look too valuable, but might be worth a coin or two. (missing apostrophe.)
81 "A burly Nubian slave watches closes and then in a booming voice he commands you both to start."
85 "Does he now?' say Zohar softly,"
Ref 76 has an issue that's not a typo per se, but is of a similar nature and would appear to be quite a blemish.
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"all of you have to then load the ship with corn bound for Athens." This is 1,500 years before the Columbian Exchange. Where did this corn come from?
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And another thing which could be a significant error, though I am not sure about it.
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Ref 12 has Lot's internal monologue mention "God's will" and 52 also has "the one true God!". I thought devout Jews would always write it as G-d? Or did this custom only arise in the more recent years? Or is the idea that it would not apply because this is spoken word in the story, not written?
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On the gameplay side, I wish ref 85 (or its archery alternative) had restored at least some of your stamina, as that would seem very reasonable given the description, and the likelihood you would have arrived there after a fight. The naval journey you get after success only restoring 2 Stamina afterwards in spite of taking "a long time" seems unnecessarily stingy.
Fixed these typos and the ones you have so far mentioned elsewhere.
At reference 76, "corn" is correct, it is only in American English that the word specifically refers to maize rather than any cereal crop. As for God, I don't really see any need to apply conventions used by modern-day Jews writing in English to the translated thoughts and speech of biblical-era Judeans.
MPerera Sun Sep 3 23:28:53 2023
Realistic if depressing ending!
Kieran Fri Sep 8 22:11:38 2023
Glad you liked this one, Yard. I'm quite pleased with it from a gameplay perspective, but I've really gone off the premise now - I think I was going through an 'atheist edgelord' phase during my early 20s when I wrote it and it makes me cringe to think of it these days! Maybe I could rewrite it into something less edgy and more respectful.
And yes, probably should have opted for 'grain' over 'corn'.
YARD Sat Sep 9 07:46:47 2023
Hmm, I may not be religious myself, yet I have a lot more positive attitude towards non-extremist believers than those "New" Atheists who are, as you say, edgelord. For what it's worth, I didn't really consider the story edgy altogether - particularly not when this very place happens to host Hellfire, Outsider! + New Day Rising and Escape Neuburg Keep (and a few more undigitized works in their vein). There is also the earnest Christianity of basically all of Robert Douglas' works here, and while I don't consider this bad in and of itself, I appreciate the presence of The Word Fell Silent as the right counterbalance to that. I also find it very reminiscent of Agora, which I consider gravely underrated, so that is another point in its favour for me.
I suppose you might be having second thoughts about including certain character who often ends up poisoning the player. To me, though, while the inclusion of him in particular came across as quite a bit of sensationalism at first, his perspective felt entirely plausible, as practically every major movement had at least one person present at the start who then thought it lost its way and became one of its greatest detractors. The way his presence allows you to carry out your task, though, needs a lot more detail to be remotely plausible.
As I said before, my main narrative issue was about how little of a plan you and any possible companions have once you actually get to the point of carrying out your mission. My main tonal issue was with Elena coming across as a plot device whose fate is completely insignificant once the task is done.
OLIVIA Tue Apr 30 11:51:19 2024
i liked this game fr
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